Read my short story please?

honestly, i had to stop reading it. There is a such thing as being to descriptive. It would be like if i said, that horrendous story that was gracefully typed on the smokey keys of the keyboard, laid dark lines that connected to one another in the form of letters. These beautiful shapes then gathered themselves together to make glorious words on the pure, innocent, computer screen; words that only the greatest lliterary artist in the world could imagine, because they are dumb.